Friday, June 8, 2007
Excercise V. Mary Shelley's Interjections
Such were the professors words, rather let me say such the words of the fate enounced to destroy me. As he went on, I felt as if my soul were grappling with a palpable enemy. One by one the various keys were touched which formed the mechanism of my being. Chord after chord was sounded, and soon my mind was filled with one thought, one conception, one purpose. "So much has been done"; exclaimed the soul of Frankenstein. More far more will I achieve treading in the steps already marked. I will pioneer a new way, explore unknown powers, and unfold to the world the deepest mysteries of creation.
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Very good. There are a couple of errors towards the end, though:
"So much has been done"; exclaimed the soul
The semicolon above should be a comma [,]. It should be inside the quotes, too. We use commas instead of periods to set off quotes because we want readers to read with the flow of our own sentences, rather than stop at the end of the quoted author's sentence.
More far more will I achieve treading in the steps already marked.
More, far more . . .
You need the comma, since the far more doesn't really restrict the former more.
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